Paragon or not?

Here is one of my Shepard's. The background is kinda meant to epresent the struggle betwen being Paragon or Renagade. Failing that it kinda works and I'm too lazt to do more.

Lookin for opinions on this one. Does it work with the original pencil linework? Or does it need to be redone with Photoshop brush tool linework like most of my images?